Sunset

11/08/2011

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By Jaimey Grant         (Divorce~Ice Cream~Delightful)

What a delightful evening. The sun sinks its leisurely way beneath the horizon while crickets, frogs, and lightning bugs make their presences known in their varied and special ways. Pinks, yellows, and oranges paint the sky—nature's canvas.

I sit on the deck, a bowl in one hand and a spoon in the other. The ice cream slowly melts as I stare straight ahead, watching the sun die its nightly death.

I love this time, a sort of limbo between day and night. It's a transitional period I envy. To become something completely opposite in the space of a few minutes, maybe an hour...what an amazing thing that is!

My hand tingles, numbness spreading through it, reminding me of the frozen treat I've ignored for several minutes now. I lift my spoon, eyes still trained on the disappearing sun.

As I dip my spoon into the bowl, a flash of red catches my eye. Finally tearing my eyes away from the sun, I notice the darkened stain on my thumb.

Damn. I'd washed my hands so carefully. Well, I thought I had. Apparently I was wrong.

I set my bowl on the little table beside my deck chair. I can't take my eyes from my hand. How could I have missed that?

My feet take me to the bathroom, bypassing the kitchen sink. I'm not sure why I make this decision but I know I have to wash at the bathroom sink, the same sink where I'd stood not thirty minutes ago, watching red rivulets wash away.

“This is all your fault,” I mutter. “If you hadn't—but you did.” I sigh. The stain disappears, leaving my skin red from the vigorous scrubbing.

I dry my hands, making sure every drop of moisture is soaked up. As I turn to hang the towel back up, I catch my husband's eye.

He doesn't blink. He never will again. I made sure of that.

I return to my peaceful perch. My ice cream has melted, dissolving any desire I have for the cool treat.

The sun's final moment of life sheds streaks of red across the horizon. Streaks of red, just like blood. Just like blood, running down a drain. Or running down his face, arms, and chest.

I chuckle. Just let him try and divorce me now.

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11/08/2011 20:41

Just so y'all know, hubby read this and liked it. ;O)

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11/08/2011 21:36

[...]watching the sun die its nightly death[...] brilliant imagery! I loved the end, maybe I have issues, but it was dastardly twisted and I do so love those. I saw it coming and somehow, I was still taken completely by surprise. Nicely done! Thank you so much for sharing!

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11/09/2011 07:07

This story gave me goose bumps and chills and I absolutely LOVED IT! What a departure for Jaimey and what a treat for any reader.

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11/09/2011 12:21

Very creative, and full of rich and chilling imagery. (And, I might add... a step or two away from your usual fare)

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Lorenzo Porricelli
11/10/2011 11:18

I like that ending - it solves any financial matters instantly! Thanks.

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Chris Janzen
11/10/2011 15:13

Dang! It is amazing how you can weave such a wicked tale in so few words! You are a master at your craft! I loved it!!

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11/10/2011 18:16

Very different from what I expected, but skillfully surprising. It was wicked and gorey without being wicked and gorey. Does that make sense to anyone?

The change from day to night and from sweet to morbid in an instant.

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11/13/2011 19:57

Yikes! I don't want to get on her bad side!! ;)

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