By S. Wayne Roberts      (Rain~Sailboat~Shame)

He called her shame.

The old schooner gracefully glided across the sultry, salty sands of time; its hull sturdy and hollow, its sails whipping in the wind and dancing with God. The once warming sun was now setting in the distance, passively biding ado to the day as it made way for the unforgiving gloom of the night.

The captain of the vessel stood at the ready; his hands steady at the helm, his heart lost to distant shores. As twilight fell upon him, he prepared himself for the worst. The pinks and blues of the cotton candy sunset faded into caramel and gray as thick clouds rolled upon the Heavens.

Like a whip crack in the night, the sky broke into a cold and lonesome rain. The vessel trembled at the weight of God’s fury; the once dancing sails now jerked and tore with the force of the storm. Lost within his own mind, the captain maintained his solid footing planted in the deck and prepared for what may come.

The captain held on tightly in defiance of the storm, though it swiftly became too much for him. The helm ripped from his clutch as the sails arched inward and the vessel rocketed deeper into the storm. The ship began to spin in a funnel-like motion, lifting from the waters below and darting through the air. Through the sky it flew until its glass shelter shattered against a wall and the vessel’s parts scattered across the floor.

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In a cold, dank basement parlor sat a man; one broken and lost within his thoughts. The room was blanketed with darkness aside from the glow of his small overhead work lamp. His project, the model bottle ship, his shame, laid splayed across the floor, tattered much like he himself. He exchanged that bottle for one smaller and clear; one filled half way with a clear liquid, its missing half serving as but one of the many spirits haunting the poor man’s head.

His tears fell like the salty sands of a life’s hour glass. His love was taken from him too soon; the once flowing sails that lead his sturdy vessel now danced with God, which shattered his existence. There were no more smooth winds and no more sunshine, and that’s why he called her shame.


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Cindy Flores Martinez
09/26/2011 21:58

This story is beautiful and moving. It comes to life with incredible vividness and it has such depth.

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09/27/2011 02:49

Good imagery in this story. There were a few phrases I especially liked; his heart lost to distant shores for one! The ending was a surprise!

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Cindy Schuerr
09/27/2011 05:17

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09/27/2011 05:25

Sorry, for the blank comment. What I meant to say:-) was this..........

I love the feeling that came over me during the storm. Great descriptions of the uncertainty of survival. I was happy to see that he survived.......or did he?

Loved the surprise ending.

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09/27/2011 05:38

Thanks for the kind words from all of you. I saw the requirements for this story and wanted to try to spin it in an unconventional way. I'm pleased that you all enjoyed it. This is the sort of thing I enjoy writing the most.

-Steve

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09/27/2011 09:10

Fantastic job, Steve! You certainly did spin it in a way that was different and yet worked so very well. I was completely surprised by the ending in more than one way.

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09/27/2011 11:33

Wonderful descriptions! I was jolted to where we really were when we hit the floor. Thank you!

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09/27/2011 13:36

Very vivd imagery S.W.R. I enjoyed this story. As well you inspired a song idea! Keep up the great work.

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09/27/2011 17:35

Steve, you sure spun me around with this one, I felt dizzy at the end... Couldn't find the word sailboat though...

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09/27/2011 19:36

Oh, thanks a lot. I'm pleased that the piece was so well received.

Jody Jones: Umm.. wow! I'm a big fan, as you know, and it means a lot that you liked it so much.

Luc: Semantics, but I'll accept it, my friend. lol.

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09/28/2011 11:42

Wow, what a powerful story filled with incredibly vivid imagery and symbolism! Brilliant execution; the way the frightening and dramatic action of the first half is a perfect allegory for his inner battle in the second half. Awesome job!

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Chris Janzen
09/29/2011 02:57

Oh my! I hardly know where to start! Your words flowed so lyrically and with such incredibly rich imagery! I had to re-read them again and again. I too was jolted by the ending, and found a hard time finding my footing. I love when that happens!! Fantastic job!

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09/29/2011 11:28

Thanks so much. Your kind words mean a lot to me.

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chester
09/30/2011 19:49

very good endeed,,,much imagination,,,thank you,so much for the story i thought it was great,,flawless,,,,,very good steve Roberts,,,great story,,,,her shame,,,

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10/03/2011 09:17

WOW! What a piece. Way to write. Short, economical use of words for maximum effect. This is one to be proud of.

All my best,

Rob M. Miller
Psst. Keep 'em coming.

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